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Thanks, Sam! I was rather proud of this poem, and I'm thankful for the input. I'd hate to say this, but it was actually pretty pessimistic. I was implying more ...

fell from his graces, fell out of his love. this is a bit wordy. suggestions: lost his graces, lost his love? or perhaps "fell from his graces and his love." ...

You reuse a lot of your images, which I actually happen to enjoy. You come off a bit vague in the last six of so lines of the first stanza, ...

This is the last time it will be like this. Leaves crinkling underneath my yielding broom as I fight the urge to straddle it, flash a wicked grin and instead ...

We lap , like dogs , the salt out of the wounds. covering mine and your lips nearing mine , Mine, mine, mine. Ick I wish you could know how, ...

Memorable, yes. But unclear. For example - you start off with the "man in woman's throat" image, and do not return to it until the latter part of the poem. ...

The beginning reminds me a bit of Lord of the Flies. But then I'm not exactly sure when you went in the middle. You have rhtyhm on some lines, and ...

It was all an economy of thin. Ginger leaves sway, crisp and bitter, as they give death wishes to pipe dreams, let them flitter out to the horizon and forever ...

This is way too abstract - I've read it over four times, and there are still sections that refuse to make sense. I'm sorry.

I wear make-up, for God's sake, and I'm most wanted. --Captain Aloisio Yes, I'll paint my face. It's what we have to do in this business. Men that hire us ...

I appreciate your critiques, but I think Rosalina's actions are more than explainable. First of all, she is drunk. Secondly, she has born years of abuse from the Emperor and ...

Destination. --Empri Have you ever fought in a war? Would you ever fight for the lives of others, if give that chance?

I didn't want to comment on this, because I would have nothing to say. I frankly and simply enjoyed this.

A storm approaches, [s]a gale[/s] to strip me of my childhood. I can feel it like the tension in a room, before the exchange of angry words. No longer are ...

I think the ending could be better, but I did thoroughally enjoy it. you whispered, as our sailboat came to earth , sails flapping wildly as the hull scraped the ...